Also incomplete, but solid enough for my critique tomorrow. Er… today, actually.
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i like this one more than the one below. i think the one below is too busy. there’s something really elegant and biting about the simpler piece. it allows me to stay more with the images instead of feeling scattered and not knowing exactly where to look. what did they say in the critique?
Interestingly enough, this one got more flack for lacking the complexity that the other one offers. I think I agree with them, and here are my thoughts about why I still consider this one only 50% finished:
1) The scale of these digital pieces is going to be larger, so some of the visual complexity will be spread out. Hopefully I’ll print these out at least as large as 18″ x 24″ perhaps even 24″ x 36″.
2) The subject matter in this image is less layered - not only is it visually less complex, but it’s less conceptually complex. Given the subject matter is masturbation, it reads to me too much like a one-line joke, which steers too close to “shock art” than I’d like.
3) The figure-visual elements are too large and begin to overshadow the mechanical schematic. Since the schematic is supposed to be the blueprint for the image, the relationship between it and the body loses its proportion.
I agree with you on a smaller screen this image reads better than the other one. I am hoping that they’ll be larger when I complete them. When this one is done, I want it to be a little less obvious what it’s about, causing the viewers to investigate a little more before feeling like they “got it.”
yeah i see how larger these could be too boring. small like your other work the other one seems to cluttered. what happened to using this type imagery with plexiglass and vellum where layers were created literally?
Left-handed fingers
wait to follow the path of
right-handed fingers.
Jason,
I sent this haiku to you as a regular email because I wasn’t sure about putting it in a comment but after reading Amanda and your comments, I decided that it might be of interest to more than just you and me.
I keep thinking that the schematic should be telling me something but so far I am too ignorant to realize what. Maybe later.
July 2nd, 2007 at 11:46 am
i like this one more than the one below. i think the one below is too busy. there’s something really elegant and biting about the simpler piece. it allows me to stay more with the images instead of feeling scattered and not knowing exactly where to look. what did they say in the critique?
July 2nd, 2007 at 5:57 pm
Interestingly enough, this one got more flack for lacking the complexity that the other one offers. I think I agree with them, and here are my thoughts about why I still consider this one only 50% finished:
1) The scale of these digital pieces is going to be larger, so some of the visual complexity will be spread out. Hopefully I’ll print these out at least as large as 18″ x 24″ perhaps even 24″ x 36″.
2) The subject matter in this image is less layered - not only is it visually less complex, but it’s less conceptually complex. Given the subject matter is masturbation, it reads to me too much like a one-line joke, which steers too close to “shock art” than I’d like.
3) The figure-visual elements are too large and begin to overshadow the mechanical schematic. Since the schematic is supposed to be the blueprint for the image, the relationship between it and the body loses its proportion.
I agree with you on a smaller screen this image reads better than the other one. I am hoping that they’ll be larger when I complete them. When this one is done, I want it to be a little less obvious what it’s about, causing the viewers to investigate a little more before feeling like they “got it.”
July 3rd, 2007 at 9:54 am
yeah i see how larger these could be too boring. small like your other work the other one seems to cluttered. what happened to using this type imagery with plexiglass and vellum where layers were created literally?
July 3rd, 2007 at 12:01 pm
Left-handed fingers
wait to follow the path of
right-handed fingers.
Jason,
I sent this haiku to you as a regular email because I wasn’t sure about putting it in a comment but after reading Amanda and your comments, I decided that it might be of interest to more than just you and me.
I keep thinking that the schematic should be telling me something but so far I am too ignorant to realize what. Maybe later.
Robert